IELTSのライティングのエッセイ！
問題はケンブリッジのIELTS7のTest2より。
"Making punishment fixed or flexible is a debatable issue. Some people believe that a fixed punishment is the best way to deter people from committing crimes. Meanwhile, others believe that a penalty should be decided by taking circumstances into account. This essay will talk about both opinions.
To begin with, a fixed punishment would provide society with some advantages. Firstly, if every penalty was unchangeable, every offender would be treated equally by the justice system regardless of their age or motivation. In Japan, for example, there was a juvenile crime which was committed by a 15 year old girl. She testified that she had known that she would be judged under the juvenile laws before she murdered her classmate. In fact, she was judged by the juvenile laws. If the laws had been fixed, she would have been judged the same as the other murderers, which might have been more equal.
However, there are some advantages of making punishment flexible. Some crimes are committed intentionally, whereas others are done without intention. For instance, there are crimes which have been committed by insane people. If penalties were fixed, criminals who premeditated their crimes and those who are insane or committed crimes accidentally would be given exactly same sentences, which is unfair. Therefore, I personally believe that punishments should be changeable.
In conclusion, although I agree with the idea that penalties should be fixed, I believe that punishment should be changed depending on the motivations and the situation of the crime. (249)"
打ち込んでみたら、１ワード足りてなかったw
前回はバランスがあまりにも悪かったので、バランスを意識して書いてみました。
何しろ、題材が難しいよなあ〜
学校のオーストラリア人の法学部出ている人にどう思う？って聞いて
意見をもらってから書き始めました。
ムズーイ。
意識してsynonym使ったり、難しい言葉使うとスペルミスとかしちゃうので、
もう少しスペルに強くなろう！
問題はケンブリッジのIELTS7のTest2より。
犯罪者への刑罰は罪によって定められているべきか、情状酌量すべきか。
To begin with, a fixed punishment would provide society with some advantages. Firstly, if every penalty was unchangeable, every offender would be treated equally by the justice system regardless of their age or motivation. In Japan, for example, there was a juvenile crime which was committed by a 15 year old girl. She testified that she had known that she would be judged under the juvenile laws before she murdered her classmate. In fact, she was judged by the juvenile laws. If the laws had been fixed, she would have been judged the same as the other murderers, which might have been more equal.
However, there are some advantages of making punishment flexible. Some crimes are committed intentionally, whereas others are done without intention. For instance, there are crimes which have been committed by insane people. If penalties were fixed, criminals who premeditated their crimes and those who are insane or committed crimes accidentally would be given exactly same sentences, which is unfair. Therefore, I personally believe that punishments should be changeable.
In conclusion, although I agree with the idea that penalties should be fixed, I believe that punishment should be changed depending on the motivations and the situation of the crime. (249)"
打ち込んでみたら、１ワード足りてなかったw
前回はバランスがあまりにも悪かったので、バランスを意識して書いてみました。
何しろ、題材が難しいよなあ〜
学校のオーストラリア人の法学部出ている人にどう思う？って聞いて
意見をもらってから書き始めました。
ムズーイ。
意識してsynonym使ったり、難しい言葉使うとスペルミスとかしちゃうので、
もう少しスペルに強くなろう！
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